tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-461821294851144963.post3529032667984655355..comments2023-07-06T04:59:16.070-07:00Comments on Cave Scrawl: 5 Princesses Dance at the Cross Bay StationJoshua De La Nocohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13704035399984174107noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-461821294851144963.post-37729626683180196532009-01-25T04:10:00.000-08:002009-01-25T04:10:00.000-08:00Good on ya Milk-Chan.It's quite possible that danc...Good on ya Milk-Chan.<BR/>It's quite possible that dancing with queens is actually an anti-aging elixir. Doctors should prescribe it. And folks might be more likely to open their minds if they found out that it doing so would keep them young.<BR/><BR/>Regardless, I've a hard time imagining you ever being old.<BR/>You'll be one those 70 year-old kids singing songs and playing poker for candy.Joshua De La Nocohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13704035399984174107noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-461821294851144963.post-34945770226750455282009-01-24T12:18:00.000-08:002009-01-24T12:18:00.000-08:00Personally, I don't think this blog needs a crowd....Personally, I don't think this blog needs a crowd. This is your place, your voice, your soapbox. I feel like a forum is a better format for inviting conversation. Of course, comment sections often become conversational, but often wander off topic entirely when they do.<BR/><BR/>It's kind of funny that you should post this today. I myself was out dancing with queens last night...but I refuse to feel old.Super Milk-Chanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04049396461601120180noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-461821294851144963.post-60866505186772771342009-01-24T06:57:00.000-08:002009-01-24T06:57:00.000-08:00It's funny.You rank the poems in reverse order of ...It's funny.<BR/>You rank the poems in reverse order of how long it took me to write them. Kaplan has this theory that no one ever moves strictly forward. When we add new skills we actually move a little backwards as we get comfortable. After we improve those skills specifically then we can improve further on the whole.<BR/><BR/>For example, I tutor a girl who on the whole is a pretty good reader. She can read complex passages and quickly assess what the main point is - but she has difficulty with specific grammar rules and when she's asked questions on this she gets lost pretty quick. So I'm working with her on grammar specifically, at first, her overall reading scores went down because she was just getting comfortable. But as she has improved on her grammar and become more comfortable and confident with it, her overall score has improved beyond were she began at.<BR/><BR/>If that makes sense.<BR/>I say that to say this.<BR/><BR/>ATI was the first one I wrote of the 3. It was inspired and I was pissed and didn't really know what I was doing but I knew it was good. IOB was the 2nd and most immediately written of the three and I was also trying to play with some tools I'm taking from Eliot and play with form. It was also the first time I experimented with font and what-not and the jury is still out on that. 5 Princesses is currently my favorite, but really, that's only because it's the one I've written most recently and the youngest child is always the favorite. I also feel a little more comfortable experimenting with form and hopefully making it a little more subtle and allowing the listener/reader to take and leave whatever they like.<BR/><BR/>Still undecided on other authors although I'm leaning against it. They would be primarily dead white men.Joshua De La Nocohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13704035399984174107noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-461821294851144963.post-67116476809671082472009-01-24T06:15:00.000-08:002009-01-24T06:15:00.000-08:00Reading the poem again this morning I like it even...Reading the poem again this morning I like it even more- it's exceedingly specific beneath seemed to me at first a general wash of metaphor. The first signs that you've become old are always painful. And I recognize the dancers as the un-dismiss-able harbingers of observed age. <BR/>Other poets? Are we talking about dead white men? Friends of yours? Poetry is no easy way to get a conversation started. Unless people just want to hate on the lady at the inauguration. <BR/>I like reading what you've written. If you have other stuff I'd also like, I'll be keen to read it as well irrespective of author.<BR/>This is a good one. of the three, I go ATI, 5 Princesses, and then further down In one Block (was IOB the first one you wrote?)twunchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15793654961516633170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-461821294851144963.post-62693073191367392422009-01-24T05:32:00.000-08:002009-01-24T05:32:00.000-08:00Thank you for sticking with me. After some explor...Thank you for sticking with me. <BR/>After some exploration I've found some wifi spots and have returned to the blogosphere to add my ten cents to the distraction capital of the universe.<BR/>This is one of 5 NYC specific poems<BR/>and the 3rd of which I actually like - the others being "In One Block" and "Adjusting to Insanity".<BR/><BR/>I'm thinking about expanding the blog to include poems by other authors. To maybe encourage convo in the comments. Thoughts?Joshua De La Nocohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13704035399984174107noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-461821294851144963.post-66874107330241089732009-01-23T21:08:00.000-08:002009-01-23T21:08:00.000-08:00Thanks.i almost forgot what I'd been missing.Thanks.<BR/>i almost forgot what I'd been missing.twunchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15793654961516633170noreply@blogger.com